Excellent description of the whirlwind of excitement. Also, I'm always a sucker for literary and/or historical allusions when germane to the story, and Aeolus certainly is.
I, however, feel/think the inclusion of Moses and the parting of the Red Sea was a bit much, and detracted from the overall impact of the story. Then again, I appreciate that I may be in the minority in that regard.
Biblical reference features heavily in my works, which tends to polarize audiences. I appreciate your criticism and will consider it along with my other notes for future revisions if I ever want to send this one somewhere for real publication. Thanks for reading!
Excellent description of the whirlwind of excitement. Also, I'm always a sucker for literary and/or historical allusions when germane to the story, and Aeolus certainly is.
I, however, feel/think the inclusion of Moses and the parting of the Red Sea was a bit much, and detracted from the overall impact of the story. Then again, I appreciate that I may be in the minority in that regard.
Biblical reference features heavily in my works, which tends to polarize audiences. I appreciate your criticism and will consider it along with my other notes for future revisions if I ever want to send this one somewhere for real publication. Thanks for reading!